Feedback on script

Feedback for our script:
What went well:                                                               Improvements:

Good range of camera shots and angles	-          Give flashes of the murder at various points throughout the play instead of having a complete flashback to begin with. Flashes can show glint of the knife; bloodied outfit; part of a victim’s face in horror, etc.
-          Effective use of Social Media messages to build tension and establish character’s state of mind.	-          Show the full murder in the newscast – CCTV from different angles. Perhaps Mila looks up into camera wildly at the end of the story and this is when off-camera Mila reacts with full realisation.
-          The simplicity of the narrative – not too many characters and twists and turns – suitable for a5-minute  project.